March
14
the scary man
there was a little boy named jack he loves playing with little kids and had so much fun with his parents. one day the house had a blackout and everything turned black his parents couldn’t do anything because his parents were away in Adelaide for a week . a man came and knocked on our door so i went up the door wondering what it was the man said hello open the door now i have got lollies puppies and chips . I was only 10 at the time so i ran to the door and opened it. It had a scary mask on and i try to hold on but he shouted and then they took me in his car. I was so scared but luckily the police came and made it all safe back in my family. Thank you Policeman!
Hello Am’Bat
I like how you put lots of description. But maybe instead of putting full stops nearly ever sentance. And some more captial letters after the full stops.
Othwerwise it was great well done.
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Hi Amelie
I love how you put lots of description into your story, but maybe next time check for capital letters after full stops, but over all great job. 👍
From Caelin 😊